domingo, 11 de diciembre de 2011

BITING AN APPLE

"You were not in my belly Steven", told me mom. She said that some children have two dads and two moms. She also told me that my other mummy's name is Joanne and she is from Germany and, my dad is Muslim and his name is Abdulfattah. Then she said that I am a great mix, and I asked her why, and mom has replied that “Best projects always turn out from the best mixes” but I don’t understand what it means.
I asked why I am not with them, so mom answered me that sometimes there are parents who don’t have enough money to care for their children, so they look for other parents as good as them for support them. And she told me that my other mom and my other dad loved very much, and for that reason, they didn’t want I was far from them, so they live in California like us!
Mom has told me these things whereas I was having a snack. Today she gave me an apple, because mummy knows I love to eat them. And after, mom asked me ¿Do you see the apple you’re biting? and I said yes and she said me that if I were with my other parents, I couldn’t eat apples because they wouldn’t buy them, and that has made me very sad, because I love biting apples, of all colors!, yellow, green, red,…
So because of that, mom told me that my other parents have left me with the other mom and dad, so I can eat all apples I want.
I like a lot how mummy explains me things. When I have finished my apple, she has given me permission to go to play to the garage.
María

4 comentarios:

  1. It´s very long and sad, also it is not coherent, and the ending is open.

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  2. ¿Do you see the apple you’re biting? HAHAHA, you forgot to rub the open question mark! Otherwise, I like so much the story! You are a very good writer!

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  3. Yes!!! I forgot! thanks for the reviews...

    Do you know who is the boy?
    A little clue... Look at the image!

    María A.

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  4. I think the ending needs a bit more "punch" to it

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