Every day their mother prepares them the breakfast before going to work. Glass of orange juice and toasts with butter. Upon entering the kitchen he found something else on his plate and he had prepared for Lucy. Two envelopes. He ran to wake her, wanted to open together two separate envelopes. In each found a check for € 700, courtesy of his parents.
Without hesitation came down to the driving school that stood at the doorway of her home. Each one with its corresponding check in your pocket. Since last June the driving school had an offer: "Getting a driving license for young people aged 18-22 years, € 665," and Otto and Lucy knew. They came to learn of it, when the man who answered said that the offer was valid only for men. The number of women rose to 850 € claiming that they need up to 50% of practical classes.
Otto had a plan. He accepted the offer. He studied hard and passed the exam. After that, he started with driving classes. One day, when he went pass the driving school, he bended the steering wheel to the left and crashed the car into it. The police and the mass media came to the crashed scene. Otto told them about the story of the money. the next day his story was on the cover
http://www.elpais.com/articulo/sociedad/Autoescuelas/Zaragoza/cobran/mujeres/elpepusoc/20111129elpepusoc_19/TesMarta
I think this story is very long and you could do it shorter. Good development of the story. But at the end, your forget to give more details in your explanation and itñs a bit difficult to follow.
ResponderEliminaryes, I'm afraid the story doesn't work. you shouldn't need to read the news piece in order to understand it. I like the names, though - especially Otto.
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