Tom hadlived withhis parentsfor almost35 years, his mother was his bestfriend andthe person whohad undertakentomakethe food, wash clothes andpaytheir whims. Tomhad a girlfriendfor 5years and they weredecidingto move in together. Tompast4 monthslefthis parents' houseand beganto livewith Anna,but Annaworked almost8 hoursa dayand spentall dayoutside. One dayTominvitetheir parents todinner at his houseand decidedto preparethe foodto surprise theirparents andthem to seehow well itwentand the progresshe had madeas a homemaker...Tom decidedthat in order toprepare apaellathat daythat his parentsbothliked. Also decidedto prepare afried breadto accompany thepaella. Tomalsowanted hismothersawthat he had alsolearned towash dishesand pans, and he decided to takewater to thepan withhot oil Tomcurrentlylives withher parentsagain, andAnne hasgone to studyabroad incall center engineering.
the final twist is a good idea but it's true to abrupt. also, you need to review punctuation: full stops, commas...
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